Repeating yourself
People tend to write the same thing two or even three times but in a different way throughout their statement.
For example ‘I am a very caring nurse and I have done this by taking the time out to spend with a patient who was distressed’ and then further down the statement saying ‘I always go out of my way to spend time with my patients as this is my caring nature.’
Two sentences written differently but actually mean the same thing, which is why it’s a great idea to get someone else to check this over for you.
Moreover, take the time to sit and make a plan for your statement to avoid this.
Write down the 6Cs (for example) as subheadings on word document and then under each heading you can give an example of each one and how you have done this to avoid repeating yourself.
Or like I said above, subheadings on the essential criteria and give different examples to show how you meet them.
Talking about things that are not relevant
It’s really easy to ‘waffle’ to try and fit the word count in to bulk your statement out.
A lot of people add things they don’t need such as; previous job roles or what qualification they have.
But this is already covered in your application and not needed in the personal statement section.
Or if it was a personal statement for university, some students have gone on to talk about the NMC standards, which again, can be narrowed down.
This is about selling yourself and showing you meet the requirements along with showing you understand the demands of the role.
As above, having the subheadings and keeping good structure will help with this.
Poor structure
A lot of people have poor structure when they don’t know how to write a personal statement or haven’t written an assignment before.
Poor structure can confuse the reader and make it hard to follow if you’re jumping back and forth from various points.
You want a nice flow to your words and something that’s going to draw the person in and make them want to hire you.
I would write your personal statement onto word document first, add those subheadings, use linking words for flow (if you take a look at Manchester Phrase bank this is brilliant for linking words).
Get someone to spell check / proofread for you and then when you’re ready you can copy and paste this onto the application page.
Last tips
My last tips for you here; add something unique about yourself to make yourself stand out from the crowd.
You want to add something a little bit different, which kind of goes against what I was saying above about not adding things that aren’t relevant haha.
But this is different, this is going to separate you from another applicant if there’s a decision to be made between you both.
Everyone who applies will have the same qualifications and more than likely the same experience.
So, add something a little extra that shows who you are as a person as well as making them think ‘wow, we need to meet this person.’
You could pick an award you may have won, volunteering you do, or something I add to mine is how I used to save pigeons with broken wings when I was 9 years old.
I link this in with my nursing and how it shows I want to save the world one pigeon at a time haha!
Next, if you aren’t from a healthcare background, think about transferable skills you can use in nursing such as; different types of communication skills, team working, autonomy, look up the 6Cs of nursing and transfer the skills you have to nursing.
I have one final tip folks; never lie on your application.
If you say you do something or have won an award, make sure you actually have.
They will question you on your personal statement in the interview and may even ask for proof such as certificates.
Nursing is all about being open and honest, so please do more of this.
That’s it from me for now, I hope this will help you write your personal statement and bag that interview, whether it is for university or your dream job.
If you need further help, please see the university careers team (if you’re a student) or if you’re part of the Royal College of Nursing (RCN) they have a careers team who are fabulous at these things too.
And finally, a huge good luck to you all.
Go smash it – You’ve got this!
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I am a Registered Nurse with over 12 years healthcare experience including: elderly care, orthopaedics, sexual health / family planning, qualified GP nurse, transgender healthcare and now in my new role as an assistant lecturer (as of Nov 2022). I believe that nursing gets a lot of bad press, so I create blogs and vlogs to help anyone considering their nursing career and to create positivity surrounding our profession as I'm so passionate about nursing.
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